Legacy of the Empress and I have been on a break and seeing other people, but on Monday we reunited. It was beautiful. And kind of brutal. We needed to change some things. A lot of things.
Thanks to my fabulous crit-er (Abby!), I realized that I have
a) a ton of words/imagery that I just love and can't seem to use enough, and
b) a lot of passive language that needs to get off it's bum and become active.
So, I put on my rubber gloves and dug in.
I managed to hack and slash all of the useless "thinking" tags off my inner monologue. After all, do you really need to say "she thought" after you've just put something in italics? I think we all get what I did there. Duh.
I went from using the word "clutching" 500 times to only using it 2-3 times in the novel (yay!), and am slowly phasing out "she realized."
I stopped using "hands/fingers" imagery for everything scary and am mixing it up.
"She saw" is now being removed. My main character has come to grips with the fact that she doesn't have to see or realize things for them to just happen around her. It's much more exciting that way.
All in all, there was much work done, and I feel good. It's always a tiny bit depressing when you realize that there are a ton of little things that could be stronger in your manuscript, but I know that I'm polishing it up into something wonderful.
When I'm done with it, it's going to be shinier than a new penny :).
Thanks for the support and accountability! You guys rock!
How are your weeks going so far? Any progress to report?